《劍14》Test 2 大作文范文解析
2019-05-15 13:40 供稿單位: 新航道
《劍14》Test 2 大作文題目
Some people say that the main environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say there are more important environment problems.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Our environment is suffering [選用的詞匯的含義應該帶一些“評價色彩”，比如這里的suffer就是“負評價”] the decreased biodiversity. Serious as it is considered, [這里是一個“形容詞+as+邏輯主語+be動詞”結構的讓步狀語] this problem is not the major one. There are other environmental problems which are more threatening [選用的詞匯的含義應該帶一些“細節”，比如這里的threatening就比important有細節意義，也是對高頻詞important的一種“有意義細節的”替換].
Although it is indeed a misfortune [選用的詞匯的含義應該帶一些“評價色彩”，比如這里的misfortune就是“負評價”] that there are fewer species of animals and plants, it is only when a person reaches a certain point of life, normally an old age, that the person may be particularly conscious about animal life as well as plant life. [主句部分是一個“強調”句] This may be illustrated by the observation that older people tend to grow flowers in the garden or to keep pets in the household and probably no longer care much about their habitation or resources. Their sympathy may be right, their worldview is however narrow. As a matter of fact, there are issues that are more pressing [選用的詞匯的含義應該帶一些“細節”，比如這里的pressing就比important有細節意義，也是對高頻詞important的一種“有意義細節的”替換] than the extinction of a few species. Also, as this worldview is adopted only by a small population of people who no longer have the material pursuit, it is likely to misrepresent what actually matters.
The vast majority of people are more likely to be concerned about the air they breathe and the water they drink. This makes a lot of sense. [這里用短句控制信息節奏] The quality of air and water decides human lives. [接下來用例證] For example, a person could die drinkingcontaminated water or get sick inhaling polluted air, whereas the person would not lose his or her life when some species of animals or plants become extinct. In addition, sometimes, the loss of some species of plants and animals is the effect of the nature’ law, and when humans should not interfere, it is certainly not as big a problem as is thought.Distinct from that, the problems with air and water ensue from stupid human activities, and they can be prevented.
In light of the above, the main problem with our Mother Nature [“大自然”的意思] is not the less diverse species of animals and plants. Pollution is more troublesome [選用的詞匯的含義應該帶一些“細節”，比如這里的troublesome就比important有細節意義，也是對高頻詞important的一種“有意義細節的”替換].